MISLEAD
By Claudette Melanson
Copyright ©
2016 by Claudette Melanson
She works at the coffee shop on the corner
opposite the park. I’ve never been able to summon enough nerve to go
inside…after I saw her in there that first time. This girl is so beautiful; I
can’t even cross the threshold to engage with her under the guise of ordering a
hot beverage. Her hair is a rope set afire. She always wraps it up into a braid
for work. I know this because we walk the same path home through that park
across the street. I’ve stared at that braid, falling to the middle of her
slender back, for as many nights as I can remember as we both made our way
toward our separate spaces, trying to gather the nerve to approach her. Wishing
I could amass the courage to ask her to go somewhere else to consume the
beverage she’s served all day to everyone else, with only me.
Her name is Gisella. I’d garnered this bit of
information on the day I’d come close to going inside and ordering that coffee
which would have allowed me to talk to her. I’d pressed my nose to the glass
for nearly an hour before I’d ultimately chickened out…again. But before I’d
hurried away, she’d emerged—her favorite white hot chocolate in hand, like the
end of the day when she took one home, its identity scrawled across the side of
the white paper cup—to take her break in the cooling fall air. I’d taken note
of her nametag before scurrying away, not even brave enough to raise my eyes
into her line of sight. My how the tables could turn…
As I watch her make her way along now, I
think about the particular blue of her eyes…like cobalt. I knew the blue of
cobalt, thanks to my high-school chemistry teacher. He used to bring in
physical examples of the elements on the periodic table which held tangible
form. Cobalt had been one of those elements, and I’m grateful for its inclusion
as it had offered me such an accurate comparison for the color of her beautiful
irises.
They’re irrationally large, those eyes of
hers. And, yes, I realize earlier I said I hadn’t been able to meet her eyes,
but after I’d learned her first name, it hadn’t taken more than five minutes to
search that piece of information, the name of the coffee shop where she works
and our hometown before finding her on Facebook. Now, I know what you’re
thinking…and don’t go jumping to conclusions. I’m not some damned stalker who
saw her at the coffee shop and couldn’t go back inside after I’d developed a
fixation for her. I knew her from before. Gisella had been in my chemistry
class in high school—the same class where I’d learned about cobalt blue.
It’s so funny, because back then I’d thought
she was pretty enough, just way too shy for my tastes. I remember I’d looked at
her once, and she hadn’t been able to hold the gaze. That reflex had turned me
off immediately, but back then I’d been such a snob. Captain and quarterback of
the football team, who’d only allowed the interchangeable cheerleaders with the
confidence of box-office stars to be granted the privilege of a date with yours
truly. Nothing like graduation to clue you in on how big a loser you really
are. After an ankle-ligament tear
halfway through the season, I’d been benched for very nearly the remainder.
This had meant I’d been invisible to scouts, no football scholarship for
Trent—no matter how perfectly I’d played in all the years that had come before.
I’d been completely left behind. I’d also been left with the appropriate
attitude to understand her lack of confidence—a construction-worker-has-been,
who still walked with a slight limp.
Seeing her again, the one day I’d happened
into the coffee shop before I’d become so aware of her, I’d felt a connection.
We are the same now…well, almost. I’d realized in the ninety minutes spent
watching her from my small corner booth in the back; she’d somehow risen above
me. Every age-appropriate guy, and some
well beyond the boundaries, had been hitting on her. Not that she’d responded
with anything other than a polite smile. Which was exactly what hooked me. She
knew she was better than any of them, and I knew that feeling well. Pity, I’d
missed that about her when I’d possessed the upper hand, but I’d been too busy
playing games with the moronic cheerleaders---games not all of them had the
stomach to play, but that’s okay; not everyone possesses the same
predilections, right?
But back to Gisella. In that moment, I’d
noticed how perfect she was…and along with that had come the realization of
what a stuck-up idiot I’d been all through junior high and high school. Just
last night, I’d stared at the snowy landscape of her face on the screen for
more than an hour. Most redheads were marred by freckles, but not Gisella. Her
face was like newly-fallen snow no one had dared to mark with their
contaminating footprint. It was a snowy vastness I greatly wished to set my own
imprint upon.
And I’d tried to do just that for more than a
year now. Since last summer. And now it’s fall again. I didn’t ask her to
coffee or to go see that really cool horror movie that was playing at the mall
last month. Her name crawls up, slowly, agonizingly, into my throat, plotting
its escape and rush to her ear. But my fright-stricken tongue lashes it back
into the depths from which it had emerged, where the syllables could, once
again, fade to impotence. The process repeating itself for the 485th time while
I play all my failures inside my head.
I allow my footsteps to land at a quickened
pace, determined to approach her this time. What stops me now is the thought
she may have caught sight of me on one of these many nights I’d strolled along
behind her before she cut down the dirt path running alongside the buildings
that eventually scored the grass at the side of the one where she lived, on the
first floor. After, I’d eventually make my own way to a different, but equally
depressing, stack of apartment dwellings, inside which I could hate
myself…again…for being such a lowly coward. But in the now, she might get the
wrong idea. She might just put two and three together and come up, mistakenly,
with four, believing me to actually be one of those stalker types. I mean; we practically knew each other. And I
would’ve been walking this same path home anyway, fate kind in the fact she
nearly finished her shift at the same time I did… I never had to wait around
very long. I really just want to make sure she makes it home safe every night,
even if I never do work up the nerve to ask her out. Plus there’s that other
guy…
I’d decided I didn’t want him anywhere near
her, whether I was around or not, when my eyes had settled on him during a
recent journey home. He was always there, slightly ahead of her and to her
right. Now him… He had stalker written all over him. I’m not stupid. I’d seen
the way he leered at her when her path diverged, and she turned her back to
him, and I’d also seen the hilt of the knife he’d recently started carrying,
peeking up to glint in the dying sunlight or, a few weeks later in the year,
the glow thrown by the streetlights standing at random attention throughout the
park. Yes, I’d set the determination in my mind he would never lay a hand on
her. He’s the true stalker, not me, her
protector. When he finally makes a move, it won’t matter. She’ll be glad I was
always following, always watching out for her. I’m not just some dumb
ex-football player; I’d always read a lot and made straight A’s in school. I’m
definitely a lot smarter than I look.
Almost like the guy wants to prove me right,
he ducks after her when her steps deviate from the smooth concrete to follow
the bumpy dirt path, brought into being by the desire of so many to save a few
extra steps. See? I’d always known it had been a good idea to keep an eye on
her. So pretty and sweet—not to mention that perfect body—it’s like she has an
‘Attack Me’ sign taped to her back.
I rush forward, realizing I’ve been hanging
back a little too far. The asshole already has a rock in his hand and brings it
down hard on the back of her head, before shoving her into the thickly-wooded
edge of the contrasting mown and landscaped space. I want to kill this guy as I rush after them,
the shrill scream Gisella vomits forth again, and then again, assuring me he’s
done no catastrophic damage. I feel relief dilute the heated venom of my blood.
There they are on the ground. The pinched
pallor of her face is visible just over his shoulder, her eyes sparking in
what’s left of the light, almost as brightly as the blade of the knife he’s
drawn from his jeans pocket.
“Shut up! Stop screaming!” he’s screaming,
himself, into her face, and my blood’s boiling again. As I near, she catches
sight of me, the cobalt locking onto my sage.
“Help me!” she cries out, her voice cracked
by harsh strain. That is exactly what I intend to do. I’m going to make sure
her stalker is never able to lay hands on her again. A mad rush of adrenaline
allows me to haul him up and off her, using the worn softness of the red-plaid
flannel he’s wearing.
“Hey! Tr—“ he tries to shout, but I backhand
the words right out of him, crushing his lips into his teeth and leaving a
slick of foaming blood across them and the adjoining skin of his chin and
cheek. We fall to the crunchy carpet of leaves and pine needles far past their
prime. Surprise claims his eyes, brown like the decaying foliage beneath us.
It’s his surprise which allows me to bend his wrist in, toward his chest, until
it breaks apart with a sound much like the crack of the sticks snapping into
disjointed pieces beneath his back.
Shock reigns his expression, both in the set
of his mouth and the gleam to his eyes. He hadn’t believed there would be
anyone around who would stop him. “But I thought… We were supposed to take her
together.”
“I decided you were never going to touch
her,” I growl at a low volume, for his ear only to hear. He’s the stalker, the
menace… He’s the one who brought a knife into all this. I have no choice. His
shattered wrist is easily manipulated; it doesn’t take much force from me to
drive his own blade into the flesh which fails him when it meets the cruel
point. I paid attention in biology. I know where his heart makes its home
inside his chest. I force the flat strip of metal to silence its push of the
stuff of life forever. I hear her shift and rattle the dry dead things
scattered across the forest floor. The realization of how this must play out
switches my brain to autopilot. I flip his inanimate shell so that it lands
atop my body, appearing to gain advantage.
“Oh my god!! Are you okay?!” sounds from
above. An assurance I’ve done the right thing. Her fingers become a part of his
shirt, trying ineffectually to pull his dead weight off me, even with the seep
and ooze of crimson over her neck, making its way down from the wound at the
back of her head to disappear under the ribbed collar of the coffee-house
t-shirt which hides the perfection of her pale shell. She might be more of a
handful than I’d imagined. No matter; that was a worry for later.
I know that now is the appropriate time to
scream. “Oh god!! Please, help me! Pull him off… He had a knife… He fell on it
when we were fighting. I-I-I th-think he’s dead.” The level of fear I’d infused
into my voice makes me wish I could applaud my own performance…had the
circumstances allowed for such a luxury.
“Oh my god, you saved me.” A sob tangles
itself up with her words.
I had. There’s no denying it. I really hadn’t planned for everything to go
down this way, but my buddy from work had provided me with the perfect in. It
would be easy to deny knowledge of him later. The company we work for has
hundreds in its employ, and we’d been careful to never be seen together after
work and even during.
“Can…can you help get me out from under
here?” She tries desperately to help further, but her efforts don’t amount to
any level that actually make a difference…but I let her think they did anyway,
using my substantial strength to push the mass of forever-stilled flesh aside.
“Thank you.” I mimic the trembling of nervous limbs and appendages after I
stand.
“It’s not your fault. You were only trying to
h-h-help me.” Her words are heavy with unshed tears. “I’ll tell them. It was
self-defense…and you saved me…” All the anxiety constricting my chest falls
away like the cut strands of a net at her words. Disbelief fills me when her
body falls across mine in a clumsy hug. She manages to whisper, “Thank you,”
before breaking into sobs, and I hold her, the delicate bones in her back
heaving under my fingers.
I hope I look appropriately shocked when I
push her gently away. I’m finding my joy hard to contain as I dig in my back
pocket for my cell. “I have to call the police.”
“Of…of course.” She’s trying very hard not to
look over at the red-clad lump, lying too small a distance from our feet. Right before I hit the send button for my 911
call, she asks in a voice weakened by the recent violence, “Hey, aren’t you
that football player I went to school with?” I nod. “After this is all over,
would you, maybe, go get a coffee with me? I-I just don’t think I can be alone
for a while.”
She asks the question I’d wanted to approach
her with for more than a year. This makes me bold enough in the now to reach
out and brush the fingers of the hand not holding the phone over her arm in a
gesture of comfort. “Hey, absolutely. Whatever you need.” Maybe after, we can
go back to her place and watch The Lost Boys together. She must watch that one
every couple of weeks. Yeah, I bet that one will make her feel better, and I’m
sure that tabby cat of hers will jump up into her lap like it always does. I
guess it’ll be the first real time we’ve watched it together, though we’ve
watched so many times before—me from my blanketed spot under the tree growing
so conveniently in front of her window.
I wonder briefly before dialing what we might do after? I have so many
ideas for all the fun games we can play together. I offer her a reassuring
smile as I hit the Send button for the call. All the wishes and dreams I’ve
played on the tape inside my head starring my Gisella can now come to fruition,
now that our real time together has begun. Now that we have forever and ever
and ever… Because, after all I’ve gone through, I’ll be damned if I ever let
her go…
Disclaimer
This story is an original work by author,
Claudette Melanson. It may not be reproduced or reposted without permission
from the author. Snippets are allowed to be used as reference for review or
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Isolated and sheltered by her lonely mother, Maura's never been able to make friends. She seems to drive her classmates away—except for the odd times they pay enough attention to torture her—but she doesn’t understand why. Maura considers herself to be a freak of nature, with her unusually pale skin and an aversion to the sun that renders her violently nauseous. Her belief is only worsened by the fact that almost everyone around her keeps their distance.
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AUTHOR BIO
Claudette
Melanson writes & edits in Guelph, Ontario, with her husband Ron and four
bun babies: Tegan, Pepper, Butters & Beckett. She graduated from Indiana
University of Pennsylvania with a BA in English and an MA in Literature. She's
wished to be a Vampire since age five. She hopes to one day work full time as
an author, since there are many, many books living inside her head.
In her spare time she enjoys watching Japanese Anime and reading vampire stories....along with other great fiction. She is also very interested in good health and is an advocate of Ketogenic eating, using whole and natural foods. Her favorite foods are bulletproof coffee, cashew flour crust pizza and treats made with xylitol and almond, coconut or cashew flours.
Future dreams include writing many more books and spending more time with her son Jacob. Her biggest dream is to make Universal Halloween Horror Nights a yearly event with hubby and son. A Rabbit Rescue fanatic, she also hopes to help rescues all over the world save many innocent lives.
In her spare time she enjoys watching Japanese Anime and reading vampire stories....along with other great fiction. She is also very interested in good health and is an advocate of Ketogenic eating, using whole and natural foods. Her favorite foods are bulletproof coffee, cashew flour crust pizza and treats made with xylitol and almond, coconut or cashew flours.
Future dreams include writing many more books and spending more time with her son Jacob. Her biggest dream is to make Universal Halloween Horror Nights a yearly event with hubby and son. A Rabbit Rescue fanatic, she also hopes to help rescues all over the world save many innocent lives.
Thanks so much for featuring me today, Wendy!
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DeleteFantastic short story. Thank you, great way to start off the Halloween season
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Laura. I'm so happy you all liked it. Always happy to contribute to Halloween joy, lol! Appreciate your time and kind words. <3
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ReplyDeleteYou are so welcome, Beth! Thank you for taking the time to read it :)
DeleteThanks for the creepy story, Claudette!
ReplyDeleteVery welcome, Glenda! Thanks for stopping by to give it a read. :)
DeleteWow! So chilling and viscerally descriptive! Well done!
ReplyDeleteWhy, thank you Bea! Very much appreciated. So very happy to hear you enjoyed it and great way to describe it! Love it. <3
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ReplyDeleteThanks Kaela!! I never thought about turning it into a whole book...until now
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DeleteSomehow I didn't see your reply until now... :O That being said... DO IT!!! I must know what happens! Do they embark on a path towards a relationship? And for the love of Pete!!! What "games"??? Does she ever find out it was a set up? Does he go to jail? Does she die? I must know the answers!!!
DeleteEven more terrifying... Do they get married and have kids before he's found out? Do one of the kids develop his instability? Is that how she finds out? Because one of her kids goes all stalkery too???
DeleteThank you! That was great. Your new to me so it is nice to read something you wrote to see what I think, now I think I need to go purchase your books.
ReplyDeleteI'm so very happy you enjoyed the story. I would be honored if you purchased other books and thank you so very much for the support!
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ReplyDeletelove the short story would love to see it turned in to a book
ReplyDeleteThanks Victoria! I just may do that. The suggestion really has me turning it over in my mind.
DeleteEnjoyed the short story.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Tommi! I really appreciate that.I aim to please :)
DeleteAmazing look into your imagination and the darker crevices of your mind, but makes for a great read.
ReplyDeleteHehe thanks Debra! My mom always told me I had too much imagination. Guess it's finally coming in handy ;)
DeleteYour mind amazes me, Claudette. Thank you for the glimpse inside of it. ��
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DeleteTruly amazing the stories you write. I hope you continue to come up with more amazing stories for us to read. Thank you!
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ReplyDeleteThat would've been a great twist! haha! Disturbing was what I was going for...so thanks a million!
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ReplyDeleteThank you Penny! I appreciate your kind feedback :)
ReplyDeleteI love a nice Halloween story. This is going to be a great book, one that I want to read very soon.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Jerry! This one might or might not become more of a novel. I am working on a Christmas horror anthology at the moment to be titled The 12 Terrors of Christmas. It'll be released later this year :)
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DeleteA good story, and looks like lots of other interesting books too.
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DeleteThanks for the chance <3
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ReplyDeleteThank you, thank you! I hope you like the writing enough to check out my other stories: https://www.amazon.com/Claudette-Melanson/e/B00IHS7GBI/ref=dp_byline_cont_ebooks_1
DeleteWow, That gave me the chills. Thank you
ReplyDeleteThen, I accomplished my goal. Thank you for your feedback!
DeleteMislead has definitely got that creep factor going for it. Just goes to show you can't trust anyone. Not even a football jock you went to high school with. Ouch. Worse I was so hoping Gisella was going to turn into a vampire & bite HIM. lol
ReplyDeleteThat would've been a really great ending, I agree! Glad you enjoyed the story :)
DeleteGreat short story!
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DeleteLoved the story, the ending was so cool :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Judy! Endings are always challenging to nail.
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ReplyDeleteThank you, Cynthia! Though I have so many other novels in the works right now, I may just come back to this story and turn it into a bigger work as well.
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ReplyDeleteI'm so happy to hear you did! Thank you for taking the time to read.
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ReplyDeleteIt's definitely on my list. I have a huge Word list of novel ideas I want to write. I may make Shimmer into a full length novel as well. Thanks for the feedback; you are very kind!
DeleteEvery time I read this story I get creeped out. You must be doing something right! Thanks :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Margaret. I love hearing that from readers. I aim to please! :)
DeleteAfter reading, I cannot wait for Halloween to come. I don't like the colder weather, but I want everything else. Love the review.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much! I always look forward to Halloween too. I love cold weather, but I'm one of the few who does lol.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE your books!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Jodi!
DeleteThe best trilogy I have read :)
ReplyDeleteWow, Judy, that means so much to me. Thank you!
DeleteEngaging excerpt, thank you
ReplyDeleteThank YOU, Lacey :)
DeleteWhat a great excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThank you! This actually was the full story, not an excerpt, but I'm thinking about expanding on it.
DeleteVery detailed, very darkly special!!! I loved ❤️ Reading this story! I didn't want to put it down once I started it! Thank you for sharing it with me! 😁 👍
ReplyDeleteYou are very welcome. Thanks so much for reading and commenting on it Very happy you enjoyed it :)
DeleteLOVE IT!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much! The feedback really means a lot to me <3
DeleteAwesome Read!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!
DeleteThis was incredible.
ReplyDeleteWow, thank you! Happy you liked it
DeleteAs you know; I love dark fantasy....you excel Claudette...you have a fan down under
ReplyDeleteThat means so much to me! Very happy to know that :)
DeleteI really enjoyed reading the entire post, thank you!
ReplyDeleteThank you for visiting and reading!
DeleteI love the first story. Your a new Author to me, so I am looking forward to more.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! I am publishing a Christmas Horror Anthology in a few days. Is on pre-order right now for .99 http://amzn.to/2gvnTSB
DeleteReally appreciate the kind words!
So creative!!! Love it!
ReplyDeleteYou are so kind! Thank you very much!
DeleteSuch creative stories! Wish I could write like this.
ReplyDeleteYou would be amazed what you can do. Keep practicing. I practiced for many years before I felt ready to publish. I know you can do it!
DeleteThank you :)
hi there Such creative stories
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! I really appreciate that :)
DeleteWell written. What is the relationship of stalker killed in the first story to the narrator?
ReplyDeleteThank you! It's subtle but he had enlisted the other guy to help him capture their prey, but then the narrator decides he wants the girl all to himself
DeleteVery well thought out book
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!! :)
DeleteI WANT TO WIN
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome - thank you so much Claudette!
ReplyDeleteThank YOU Kim! Sorry for the late reply.
DeleteGreat Story, Claudette :)
ReplyDeleteReally appreciate that, Rainne. So happy to hear you enjoyed it :)
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